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Standing on my roof
Wind blowing in my hair
All alone was I
Because of my who I'd come to be
Others only stared
Then it began to storm
Salt tears on fresh rain
I fell off my roof
Sure soon to feel more pain
You caught me without harm
Even in the awful beating
Of the thundering rain
All the tourment of lonelyness
And all my inside pain
Your my sheild and Coat of Arms
My flag to show the way
After all the awful things I said
Even closer now you stay
And my heart this Rooftop Storm tonight
Forever will be warmed
By a fire I'll never let fade
©2003-2010 ~Flaming-Guitar
:iconflaming-guitar:

Author's Comments

These are my poems.
Wow. Thats was soooooooooooo hard to figure out.

Thank yous: Edgar Allan Poe, Robert Frost, and more.

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:iconmemoryfinder:
WOOW... that just ROCKS... seriously... that is an awesome piece... you get across a lot... and the flow of it is beautiful... wow... great job

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Harder than a drama
Softer than a porn


Wishing I was there... Wishing you were here...
:iconflaming-guitar:
Thank you so much! Its been a while since I was here last, so its nice to hear that someone likes my stuff. :)
:iconsar-13:
That's a lot of emotion and pain expressed. i've never seen any poems written with that type of emotion before.
I feel poems are the easiest means of expresion, don't you?
it displays a good message to others. that someone is there to catch you when you fall. you usually only hear about , you have to help yourself, and forget of those support around you.
:iconj4d:
that is the most painfull thing i have ever read,
the way you write it
i can see the things you describe

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<3 Yeah we bleed just to know were alive <3
:iconlavagirl:
wow, that is really really really really really really really good
:iconhushedvoice:
that's cool.

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>> H <<
:iconstrangestone:
I love this poem,
I can just invision some one slipping off their roof,
and into their lovers arms,
Very well done.

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One was apart,
The other seemed whole,
The boy was smart,
The girl lived like a mole.
Together they are,
As one as the same,
Two who’ve come so far,
And will never be put to shame. -_-

~~Strangest One
:iconmaraudian:
It's excellent. One thing - the word "lonelyness" doesn't exist. ;) It's "loneliness."

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Mr. Muggles is a studmuffin.
:iconcrazybrokensmiles:
i love it!!!

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(")_(") signature to help him gain world domination

....every sigh and scream i make... But I still don't miss you yet....

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