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Standing on my roof
Wind blowing in my hair
All alone was I
Because of my who I'd come to be
Others only stared
Then it began to storm
Salt tears on fresh rain
I fell off my roof
Sure soon to feel more pain
You caught me without harm
Even in the awful beating
Of the thundering rain
All the tourment of lonelyness
And all my inside pain
Your my sheild and Coat of Arms
My flag to show the way
After all the awful things I said
Even closer now you stay
And my heart this Rooftop Storm tonight
Forever will be warmed
By a fire I'll never let fade
These are my poems.
Wow. Thats was soooooooooooo hard to figure out.

Thank yous: Edgar Allan Poe, Robert Frost, and more.
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smolartzy Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
This speaks to me sooo much! So beautiful!
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nicholaswallace98 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2015
i like ur poem
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Diamonds-Dont-Shine Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like it ! 
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Kevdraws223 Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Student Writer
incredible. awe provoking.
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The-New-Host Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That's is really good keep it up.
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Qwertynim Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Student General Artist
Wow.....just wow.....


I wish I could write like tht. Can u give me feedback on some things I've wrote so far? I feel like u could teach me so much,

Just wow.....
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lastxenon4 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
that is an awesome poem, made me cry a little :'(
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shadowluv101 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow that was really impressive
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artistikitsune Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
-slowly claps- I literally saw the poem and that my friend is impressive
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Razaala Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
wow absolutely beautiful! i can really relate and Ilike your style. I'mnew and want to start loading up my poems. i have a lot i want to share. how do you do it though? I tried but then it keeps on saying that i need a preview picture. but other poems don't seem to need one and i even tried doing something stupid like that. for it it's about the words. please help if you can! Again I really love your writing. hopefully u be able to see if u can relate to mine :)
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zoalin Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Student Writer
it has an emotion of lonesome and sadness
it s nice
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alygatorleigh Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012  Student General Artist
soooo beautiful.....you put a lot of expression into this
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meaningfulllife Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Student
Wow the best
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Blacksoulstar Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i feel u all. deep thinkers, thats wat we are. why cant the world acsept that?
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DarkAngelsDeath Featured By Owner May 10, 2012
thats very beautiful
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d3v1l-ChIlD Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
that was really good and i would know i write poetry for real
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CK1999 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012
"Salt tears on fresh rain"
That was my favorite!
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RainbowBlur Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oops I forgot to write how I thought about this. Ok, so, you are talking about a person that you so horribly scarred, and they help you out, even after what you had done? If so, that is so beautiful, it puts a tear in my eye... *sniffle* i love it, even if that is not what you were talking about. It is a beautiful poem, and I thank you for sharing it with the people of dA and the ones that visit. I hope I got all of this all right, and I love the poem!
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RainbowBlur Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Um does deviantart do that by itself or do i have to do something? cuz i got a story i wanna put up a story
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AnimaNinja23 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you submit it as art and put it under litrature i had the same problome
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RainbowBlur Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oh thx!
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AnimaNinja23 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
u r welcome^^ glad i could help
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RainbowBlur Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oopsi said story up twice :P
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RainbowBlur Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
nevermind!
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tiggerlover12 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012
I love it.
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LilSugarAngel Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
BEAUTIFUL! I hope you don't mind me sharing this in my Poetry Club!
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PinkChickenInk Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012  Student General Artist
:clap: terrific!!
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loveamysteriousthing Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2011
So sweet
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thecr8tive1 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2011  Student General Artist
*sniff* *sniff* its so sad but yet romantic, i could just imagine the catch as she falls into the arms of his...ahh so great *sniff* *clap* clap* great job! great job!
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foxesdawn Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2011
awesome poem
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kittyOwO Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
so cool! OoO
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tararleigh Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2011  Student Photographer
great choice or words
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Niki63 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2011   Artist
wow
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KayBee120 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2011  Professional Artist
Lovely
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life-of-the-dreamer Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2011
Nice poem!^^
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Ryonjr Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice
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becstar2410 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011
OMG !!!!!!!!!!!!! I JUST LOVE THIS POEM
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destandnikkii Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love this poem
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westskyl107 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011  Student
i really like this poem
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starterse Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2011
good pritty
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theoutcastgirl Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
that is pritty good
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gfssysssgfs Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
wow, your pretty good.
oh um loneliness is spelled wrong

Fav Dev: Funky-Chick (check her stories and poems out)
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AhMillie Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Hey, how can you submit poems? I was trying to do it myself but it only excepted the cover picture... -_- can someone please help?
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Wow very deep, I like it :)
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asmaa15 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2011
beautiful.i love it
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firefox099 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
in favs
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Nonsenseisprohibited Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2011
This is amazingly written.
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gfssysssgfs Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
if you like this, search
Funky-Chick
she is really good- very emotional
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FrugleRetort Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
not bad
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sephanglover Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2011
wow that is so deep i loved it i do some poetic stuff my self do you want to watch me? im new at this stuff so i have no one watching me so could u watch me please
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